Score: 8

"Could Have Taken More Advantage of Premise"

submission: 3rd Grade Transformers

date: October 20, 2009

I actually laughed out loud a couple of times, and the duration was just right. I am glad you did not include this with the plethora of other Transformers parodies because it would have felt more stale and just part of a trend.

What I really liked was you using a third grade parody to describe it. I personally loved the movie, but you did not have to rely upon over exaggerating a negative detail about the movie to be funny. While you did have to result in random acts of violence/cursing, and I suppose that's you style, the awkwardness of the third graders were amusing. And who did the high pitched voice who was screaming "Not Now Charles!"? I thought that was one of the funniest set of lines of the short.

I actually thought the "GET OFF THE STAGE CHARLES" part was funny, but the "human sacrifice" and "i have to take a poo" bits were a little much/out of place, which detracted from the humor. For the former, a third grader willfully stabbing another does not fit the "young, ill-prepared, and untalented" theme you had going on. If the stabber had not known it was a real sword and started freaking out, as well at the victim screaming, I think that would have both been funny and sticking to the theme.

The latter just bugged me because the play "director" seemed funnier as a "verbally" abusive person, rather than a physical one. An adult yelling at the 3rd grader seems funnier to me because a) the way had the guy yelling and b) because we slightly pity the kid for getting yelled at so much, but a cartoony beating off stage just seems generically slapstick. However, I actually laughed during the devastator attempt because while the idea of kids accidentally hurting themselves while trying to form devastator is predictable, the over the top violence they suffered made it funny.

The animation was fine. Not TOO much going on, but the way you presented the costumes was nice, and kudos for the well animated curtain, instead of just a horizontal tween which you could have gotten away with. I also applaud the walk cycle of the kid in the rectangular costume. Perspective is a bitch D:.

Overall, I really like what you were going for here. I hope I did not sound pretentious by going in depth of what *I* thought would be funny/unfunny, but the people here saying it did not have the "egoraptor charm" do not know what they are talking about. Not everything you do has to be fast paced and have super-zany humor for you to give off your 'charm'. And we all have to remember, you wanted to try something silly by poking fun at a popular movie. I don't think your goal was to create a comedy milestone for yourself, but just to have fun with robots and 3rd graders.

Score: 7

"Amusing, But Too Many 4Chan Memes"

submission: Pokemon: Pee Red Version

date: July 1, 2009

As a *Pokemon* parody, I enjoyed it. There really is not many of them and there is so much to make fun of. I actually found some parts to be funny. I laughed at Charmander's scream. Some parts I rolled my eyes at.

But what really began to kill me were the memes. While I read why you made Bell-awesome do it because it makes sense, having a meme-based pokemon just bugged me. I love that picture, but when used in a flash movie, I think it should be more discreet. Meme's get their "humor" from being forced and repetitive (which is another reason why I personally did not get much from it), so what might work on a forum may not translate well in animation.

Gary-Or 'Mary''s-voice actor had a noticeably worse microphone quality than the rest, which degrades from the overall quality. Also, feel free to loosen the sound quality a bit, like to 32 or 48 kbps. I am sure we can handle an extra megabyte (unless this was the only way to get it under the default 8mb limit).

The sprite editing as a little distracting. How come you changed the main character's appearance? Out of curiosity? It was not because they looked different, only because the editing was not on par with the original graphic, in terms of quality.

Nice use of MissingNo, even though I was hoping for a more climatic ending, or a play on the idea of how fast they both got to the elite four. But I was amused for the most part, and it's nice to see you plan to pursue original projects. Good luck!

Score: 9

"Will Keep Watching"

submission: Hyperboy: Episode 5

date: May 22, 2009

This is the first time I've seen the series and I am very pleased! Nice action, which is stylized so you don't get generic "bam, boof, wiff" action. Appropriate humor, which was actually FUNNY and not forced. The drawings and animation seemed to improve as time goes by.

Really well done preloader. Lot's of techy detail, but I did not associate "techy" with this animation, unless I missed something in previous episodes. Did you draw that in a separate program and just animate it in flash? There was a gigantic jump though in the first scene in terms of quality, from a super nice preloader to a kind of bland scene/animation, but it picked up the quality once he put on the Hyper Suit.

I really respect your method of finding a simple animation style to get action across. Perhaps I am assuming to much, but it looks like you made simple-looking characters so animation would not take as long, but you still want the "cutting edge" feel, so certain close ups have more detail or realistic anatomy. I've trying to figure out a way to create an action cartoon with a style that is faster to animate, so I tip my hat to you.

You get a 5 from me to bump that score higher, and a 9/10 for the above reasons. Now I will watch the previous ones to catch up. Looking forward to the next one!

Score: 6

"Funny Dialouge, Animation Hurts It"

submission: BUY The Amazing Stuff

date: February 24, 2009

The announcer was so eccentric that I was hoping of actually seeing him do stuff rather than just hear him, and his voice is crazy. The joke itself was pretty funny in the beginning, but it kind of trailed near the end. Had it been executed better in terms of visuals, it would have made a much better submission. With different shots, better drawings, and a tighter script, I wouldn't be surprised if this was put on the front page.

Score: 8

"Meant For Sonic Fans"

submission: Sonic Shorts: Volume 5

date: February 20, 2009

I always enjoy watching these. I STILL want to make something for the last one!

The animation in this one was better than previous installments for the most part. I do not know where people are getting adjectives like "terrible" in terms of animation. Obviously there are different levels of skill, but I think everyone stepped it up. Everyone had a decent take on Sonic's design, so it's always fun to see that, and the jokes were more varied.

Speaking of which: the humor. I found this animation amusing and comical, but I didn't really find myself chuckling too much because of good amount of animations were rather predictable/drawn out/obvious. The olympic one I could see coming a mile away, and while the ring was actually a nice touch, it probably could have been executed better. Knuckles knocking out Sonic was well animated/drawn in my opinion, but I just did not find anything witty, or slapstick enough.

The main issue I've seen with these series, and while is an unfair one, is that a lot of the jokes would only appeal to Sonic fans. That's fine if you have a specific demographic, but I'm Sonic fan and even the most esoteric ones sometimes weren't that funny. Wonchop's peace I found funny because I understood the silliness of getting all the Chaos Emeralds in Sonic 2 (it was Sonic 2 right? Because I could have sworn you could transform in Sonic 3), and plus it was well animated. Now it would take a pretty informed Sonic fan to know that, but the "erectile dysfunction" bit was broad enough so that non-Sonic fans could find some humor in it, and plus it was in context.

I personally never found too much about the Sonic universe funny. "Comical", yes, but not hilarious. There were a handful actually that I found naturally funny instead of relying on an esoteric reference. So to demonstrate an even greater amount of skill, you should appeal to both fans and non-fans of Sonic to garner further appreciation for the series!

Score: 9

"I Feel Sorry for Not Seeing this Sooner"

submission: One Big Morphing Orgasm

date: February 13, 2009

Only "Daily 4th Place"? This probably contained more animation than the other "Dailies" combined.

Fantastic morphing effects with very smooth animation. The only rift in the continuity was when the entire flash looped (the music skipped). The fact that it was a collaborative effort makes it an even greater demonstration of skill. Obviously there was no plot or concrete characters, but that probably caused the relatively low attention, regretfully. While I too prefer narrative animations, this was very pleasing to watch. Under appreciated, I do say.

Score: 6

"Mixed Feelings"

submission: Left 4 Speed

date: February 5, 2009

I like Left 4 Dead, and it's cool to see a parody of it, but this was of lower quality that I expected.

First of all, the drawings in this were not Egoraptor style. The big eyes and squiggly brush strokes is reminiscent, but too generic to warrant such an accusation.

What IS reminiscent of Egoraptor is the pacing of the short, but again, does not warrant cries of stealing. However, you also made a Grand Theft Awesome, so to assume you were not inspired by Egoraptor at all this time around is easily just as silly as assuming you did rip him off.

Now, about the actual animation. The Witch and Hunter bits were amusing, and so was the end, but that really was it. It's not that there were no jokes being thrown left and right, but the parts that WERE jokes I didn't really laugh at, such as the Boomer, Smoker, car, and butt-shooing scenes. Boomer scene had potential, but was not executed well (again, pacing). The smoker licking Louis' crotch was bland to me, especially the "hell no" line. Car scene, kind of generic bumrush of enemies. And the butt shooting part was just not my taste I guess, because since it is so random, I could see people finding that funny.

I am black and was not offended by your portrayal of Louis. To those who cry out to this, I appreciate your sensitivity, but damn this was drenched in satire, no need to get hissy fits. BUT, at the same time, you, the author, should not assume people know about online players making fun of Louis. Esoteric inside jokes like that do not work very well. You should have known people who do not play the game would think you are just using a stereotypical black person, who acts nothing like Louis.

The voice acting was decent, minus Louis's. Drawings got the job done (nice attention to background too). But, you combined real voice actors with actual audio from the game. That was kind of weird, hearing a high-pitched male voice as Zoey and then have her screaming audio from the game. Choose one or the other next time.

But there just is not enough substance to this. I do not know why you rushed it if there was no deadline. And selling a shirt for this is out of taste in my opinion. And yet, the score is ridiculously high with over 100k views. Take a video game, create a couple of wacky scenarios, and draw gets someone this high of score and attention? But this is not your fault. I completely understand and relate when it comes to making cartoon/jokes because you enjoy it and it's for fun, not solely for popularity (but selling the shirt could make people think otherwise).

Supah Nin10doh! is a gem in the video game parody trend, so I am not anti-VG parody. But you could have been a lot more clever with this. It looks like you took some isolated things you thought were funny, spliced them together, and animated it. Nothing evil about that, but that means the score will suffer (er, well, from me). I suggest make the pacing more coherent, make less inside jokes, make the "plot" less chopped up.

Score: 8

"Oh Snap"

submission: Trad Animation Collection

date: September 4, 2008

So you've graduated, right? That was some pretty skilled traditional animation! The drawings looks professional, all the movements followed through nicely, and the overall animation was of high quality. The baseball and morphing clips were the two most impressive parts. I only give you a review this low because it was wasn't really a full flash, more like a portfolio. However, I give you a 5 for the relatively, atrociously low score.

I do hope this amount of talent lands you a great job.

Score: 9

"Very well done!"

submission: Sonic Shorts: Volume 1

date: February 27, 2008

I enjoyed this collab. All were talented artists and I enjoyed the different drawings and interpretations of Sonic. The voice acting, mainly by Gamebuddy, was excellent. If I ever made a Sonic movie, I'd probably ask him to act.

I found many of the jokes witty, but only laughed out loud at Shadow pointing at the Chao, but I enjoyed the presentation. But the main point why yall didn't get a 10 from me is that some of the jokes were very esoteric to big Sonic fans. Having tidbits of fan service to the long-time Sonic fans is always fun, I love it, but when a joke is founded on knowledge that only that particular demographic would understand/find funny, it loses impact, but is not terribly bad (ala Family Guy and Simpsons).

But great collab nonetheless. I think this one is much better than that older Sonic collab. Shoot, I may have to consider collaborating in the next one if time allows me to :D.

Score: 9

"Great Work"

submission: Cosmos Chaos

date: October 21, 2007

I really enjoyed this movie. A constant pace with constance movement=a hell lot of animating, so I congratulate you for actually making this. The drawings seemed to get better as the movie progressed (which was intended by you) and it was a nice use of 3D. Did you use Swift3D or import a video? The chase scene was the best part, the way you animated the water and speed.

Any criticism I have is maybe try a movie with voices, sound effects, and more story telling features. When you do it to a music video, it's a little harder to get people into the characters, and yet you still managed to make a decent connection. Though I know that was not the goal here, but besides that, it's hard to find anything wrong with this without being nitpicky. 5/5.