I actually laughed out loud a couple of times, and the duration was just right. I am glad you did not include this with the plethora of other Transformers parodies because it would have felt more stale and just part of a trend.

What I really liked was you using a third grade parody to describe it. I personally loved the movie, but you did not have to rely upon over exaggerating a negative detail about the movie to be funny. While you did have to result in random acts of violence/cursing, and I suppose that's you style, the awkwardness of the third graders were amusing. And who did the high pitched voice who was screaming "Not Now Charles!"? I thought that was one of the funniest set of lines of the short.

I actually thought the "GET OFF THE STAGE CHARLES" part was funny, but the "human sacrifice" and "i have to take a poo" bits were a little much/out of place, which detracted from the humor. For the former, a third grader willfully stabbing another does not fit the "young, ill-prepared, and untalented" theme you had going on. If the stabber had not known it was a real sword and started freaking out, as well at the victim screaming, I think that would have both been funny and sticking to the theme.

The latter just bugged me because the play "director" seemed funnier as a "verbally" abusive person, rather than a physical one. An adult yelling at the 3rd grader seems funnier to me because a) the way had the guy yelling and b) because we slightly pity the kid for getting yelled at so much, but a cartoony beating off stage just seems generically slapstick. However, I actually laughed during the devastator attempt because while the idea of kids accidentally hurting themselves while trying to form devastator is predictable, the over the top violence they suffered made it funny.

The animation was fine. Not TOO much going on, but the way you presented the costumes was nice, and kudos for the well animated curtain, instead of just a horizontal tween which you could have gotten away with. I also applaud the walk cycle of the kid in the rectangular costume. Perspective is a bitch D:.

Overall, I really like what you were going for here. I hope I did not sound pretentious by going in depth of what *I* thought would be funny/unfunny, but the people here saying it did not have the "egoraptor charm" do not know what they are talking about. Not everything you do has to be fast paced and have super-zany humor for you to give off your 'charm'. And we all have to remember, you wanted to try something silly by poking fun at a popular movie. I don't think your goal was to create a comedy milestone for yourself, but just to have fun with robots and 3rd graders.

I liked the way this was animated. The lip sync was a bit choppy at parts but I am not expecting articulate syllable matching drawings in all flash movies.

The humor was an important part for this, and most of the non-sequiturs were amusing (the Bidfoof one in particular since I can relate to that). But the only time I let out a laugh was the sudden purposely-lackluster "Oh shiiiiiiiit" remark when the whale attacked.

Besides that, the rest of the humor was adequately entertaining, but for me, the randomness messed up the timing and building of jokes. I know that was what you were aiming for, so congrats to that, but I think the humor suffered (well, for me at least) because of it.

Memes usually kill flashes for me D:. I really think what is funny on a forum does not translate well in to flash. The one meme reference I thought was well placed, though still could have done without, was the very brief awesome face when the missile exploded (nice job tying those two..er..."stories" together).

The microphone quality hurt the dialogue, but that's a rather inconvenient thing to fix. They make ~$15 microphones that get the job done and with a sock over it, it usually is pretty good for flash movies.

I like the drawing style though, so with some tweaking, this could be a pretty successful series.

I feel bad since I probably would not have watched it unless it was on the front page, but I saw Hania's news post saying 1) she made the music and 2) it took you a longass time to complete so I gave it look.

I am happy to say I was more than satisfied!

No sappy, dark, or cute narrative here. While there is nothing wrong with those types of movies, I tend to find animations of this style (sold color shapes with vector styled drawings) like the types mentioned above. Those types may leave a feeling of art expertise and well crafted narration...But sometimes there is a disconnect between my interest and my appreciation.

This animation had it all. A unique story, a visually appealing and talented style of animation, humor, and oddly enough, action! The music was also varied and fitting for its respective scenes, and helped to keep the story connected and succinct.

Your characters were legitimately interesting. Tar boy's origin was like something out of an action cartoon, but you took a 'silly' idea like that and took it to another level, even though the base premise was already interesting. Telling the story through the view of the boy and (Grandpa?) added that bit of humor and a peek at the world you have created about the robots. And absolutely love that you are making a second part to this. I could have never guessed a tar pit of robots would become a demonic humanoid *boy* though (why did you go with 'boy' instead of 'man' anyway?)

The action was surprisingly well done. Especially that scene with the glowing special effects in the dark. And I read one review that trashed the animation for being "mostly tweens". Obviously people like this have no idea what they are talking about since most of the animation seemed frame by frame, even if it wasn't redrawn every keyframe. But no. I'm SURE you spent 8 months just being lazy.

Overall, excellent animation, entertaining story, and interesting characters. Looking forward to the next month.

Your voice sounds a lot like the guy who does Ichigo's english voice, but the hisses and gargled parts come from a lower quality microphone (I think?), damaging the quality. While I also suggest you keep improving the acting, I HIGHLY suggest investing in a better microphone, because you have a nice voice.

I was looking for simple background music to go along to a storybook-styled animation, and this fits the role. But it's got a nice to beat to it while sounding lighthearted. I like it so much that I am disappointed there isn't more to it. I could definitely see this as a beat to a modern R&B/Hip-Hop song. If I stick with this as the background music, I will most definitely credit you. Well done!

the thing s we have to review this...what do they mean?! neway, i liked this msuic, theperfectbackround music for a fast paced anime scene!